It’s not so much a question of getting a different story line as it is of getting a story line at all. What is the story here? A bunch of kids running around the yard shooting each other hardly seems like a “video.” It’s more an exercise to see if the camera works. The framing of many of the shots seems haphazard and we never really have an opportunity to form any kind of empathetic connection with the people who are shooting at each other.
If you want to progress as an independent videographer, focus first on story, then on shooting and composition, finally on the edit, music, etc.
Jack
http://www.videoccasions-nw.com
