Anthony –
I would echo what the others have said but take heart in that these criticisms are very constructive and can be solved using technical means and practice in filming and editing (while others will argue the point, you can fix a wealth of issues in post, just takes a lot longer than if you have it good on tape first time).
What you do have is a story (albeit not one I would watch twice) and some vision of what you want to say and show – Try to develop that as it is not only a good thing to have in creating video, but in still photography, writing and public speaking and will serve you well in future years.
Hone your technical skills and spend time developing your minds eye and practice, practice, practice at bringing those two things closer to excellent.
