Short Film - On Wheels | Videomaker.com

TJninja

Last seen: 7 years 4 months ago

Joined: 02/19/2010 - 9:09am

This is our first short film - On Wheels

please tell us what you think!

Thank you for watching!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I-ZsxiXN7hU

for more info go to

http://www.timandmarcoareawesome.com/

hmueller

Last seen: 2 years 7 months ago

Joined: 07/03/2009 - 6:12pm

If it is your first short film it is really COOL! There are some really neat shots. I liked particularly the ones taken from the board.

That said, it is too long. It does not seem to have a point to it, other than that skateboarding is fun. A short film needs a story, with a beginning, middle and end. You need to get into the story right off the bat. For more info, read "Making Short Films" by Jim Piper, and "Making it Big in Shorts" by Kim Adelman.

Heidi

07/01/2010 - 12:04am Permalink

TJninja

Last seen: 7 years 4 months ago

Joined: 02/19/2010 - 9:09am

Thank you

It does have a story and 3 parts, first part is the "happy" part, the part where he starts his day, the second part is the "sad" part, his day is ruined and hes feeling sad, but then his day takes another turn with the mugging, part 3 is return to happy and resolution. Its a silent film and is driven by music.

thank you for your interest and suggestions

07/01/2010 - 2:40am Permalink

Orlando136

Last seen: 6 years 12 months ago

Joined: 06/30/2010 - 4:28pm

I kinda liked it, really. Maybe it could have been 2 minutes shorter but it's cool as it is. I will soon be making a short film and i'll post it here when it's finished. Keep up the good work.

07/01/2010 - 10:05am Permalink

TJninja

Last seen: 7 years 4 months ago

Joined: 02/19/2010 - 9:09am

cool thank you! I look forward to seeing your short film!

07/01/2010 - 7:39pm Permalink

Owlcrew

Last seen: 8 years 8 months ago

Joined: 10/22/2008 - 2:06pm

interesting idea

07/01/2010 - 7:49pm Permalink