A Disappointing Dissatisfying Short Kayak Film

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    • #49745
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      Hey guys, I’m a beginner at this game. I have recently entered a film I made into a short kayak film comp. In order to get into the finals I need to be in the top 6 video views for the competition, but because of my newness to this I have no reputation and therefore no followers!

      Here is the film I created:

      https://vimeo.com/43822191

      I would love to see your feedback and some suggestions on how to improve video views!

      Thanks

      Dave

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    • #203556
      AvatarJackWolcott
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      For me, the piece doesn’t hang together. There’s no real story line; I don’t know where I am and what I’m watching, why the guys are swinging on ropes,or diving off the bank into a standing wave, etc. The fades to black don’t really make any narrative sense and create a choppy feel to the piece. The slow motion seems totally gratuitous: it doesn’t reveal anything about kayaking technique, the awesomeness of the piece of water the kayaks are on or anything else. It’s a gimmick.

      The piece appears to be about the challenge or thrill or joy of kayaking Class III water, yet the music suggests something entirely different, perhaps a romantic picnic in a flower-covered meadow on a hot summer day.

      The photography is good and you’ve got some great shots of kayaking. Your cuts, however, especially when they relate to slow motion, sometimes come at inopportune moments — 1:16 for example, with the green boat. I don’t really get to see the kayaks in operation.

      The kayaking you show us is really cool; lots of white water, spills and thrills. You’ve got the footage. Why not try editing this again. Pick some really up-tempo music, something that drives the piece, and cut the kayaking shots to the music. Use slow motion (if you must) where it reveals something about the skills or dangers. I think this will build the piece into something really exciting.

      Jack

      http://www.videoccasions-nw.com

    • #203557
      Avatardoublehamm
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      But Jack it is suppose to be Disappointing and Dissatisfying!

      Anyhow, all joking aside, I think there is a place from some slow motion in this video, but not sure if constantly changing speeds is doing it. It seems forced.

    • #203558
      AvatarAnonymous
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      I’m assuming from the nature of the contest that the video is intended for viewing by avid “kayakers” (not sure what the appropriate term is). I’m also assuming that you yourself fall into that group. Coming from an outsiders view, I don’t think the first scene works well. It was confusing going into a video on kayaking and the first thing I see is guys swinging on ropes. Nothing wrong the shot itself, just its position in the video. I would start off on more ‘action-y’ shots of actual kayaking and then if I wanted to keep the rope shot, put it in later. I liked the dissonance of somber music behind slow motion action shots. To me it conveyed a feeling of passion for the sport. Definitely for an insider crowd though.

      That being said, to help attract views I would go on kayaking forums and other kayaking interest sites and link the video. Also, I would get everybody in my social network to view the video. One way to do this is to create Facebook event and link the video, and ask people to “like” it. Otherwise, just put it out there anyway you can to maximize the traffic to the video. Good luck!

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