Thanks, Jaimie, for that information. Certainly worth investigating as I prepare my materials. My general experience with "after the fact of death" productions (funerals and photo/music montages and tribute or end-of-life memorials is quite a bit different in scope to what you describe with Now I lay me... but I can certainly see some correlation.
EVAN: You have ALL the components needed (if not a bit more closer shots to augment the distance shots) and I do not presume to understand what all is expected or wanted/needed by dog enthusiasts seeking the kind of knowledge you certainly possess.
My initial perception aside from knowing this was a promo video and that the content was relevant was this:
The music was incongruous with the tempo of the visuals.
The information and transitional elements were slow by comparison.
There was too much going on all at once for me to grasp anything but the apparent overall message.
Instead of the push or pull diagonal transitions and the constant background I personally would cut on and off with titles and relative visuals.
I would up-tempo the visuals to match the audio bed, or find a less energetic audio bed and use longer (lingering) info points rather than slowly bringing them in or out.
I would reduce the number and variety of fonts, make them a bit larger and keep with sans serif font styles.
I would attempt to identify and utilize some closer, tighter shots rather than having a predominance of long or wide shots where I cannot grasp the details as well.
PLEASE KNOW, Evan, I am NOT an prima dona and I do not consider myself the be all, end all expert. I do have experience, have been blessed with a degree of success and know what works for me, what I like to see and hope I have a general handle on what keeps people focused on my productions.
I DON'T DO SLOW, nor do I do the Hyper-fast super-fast cutting style prevalent in today's video market, nor the disconcerting over-exaggerated hand-held (Cloverleaf, or Blair Witch) styles. I may be a product of my age ;-)
And I do not in any way mean to imply that your work isn't workable or working or effective just as it is. I visited your website and was quite impressed with an intro teaser you had posted there.
Hope I've not hit you wrong with all this.
Regards, Earl