Script Help!

1. Cubulo
   Member

   

   Hello, I have been writing a move script for a while and I am stuck. I don't have any idea what should happen next. I need you guys to help me. Here is a pdf of the file so far. Please help me. 
   http://rapidshare.com/files/140362992/Thief_demo.pdf.html

   Posted 3 years ago #

2. ralck
   Member

   

    I took a quick read through it.  I found it a bit confusing since you used "talent 1" and "talent 2."

   It seems your story to this point is progressing fairly fast.  Do you plan to keep it as a short 1-2 minute film?

   I would say one way to end it is to go with a funny bit-comedy kind of idea.  This is because you haven't gone into any character depth (you haven't even named the characters :-P), and you've written completely plot to this point.

   Unless you plan to develop the part you've written more to develop character personas and stuff, I just don't see this as much more of a bit comedy gag.  I don't mean to sound rude or anything here- just trying to give you an honest opinion.

   Hope this helps... and as always my opinion is just an opinion so take it with a grain of salt and feel free to reject it outright. :)

   Posted 3 years ago #

3. Cubulo
   Member

   

   K, I modified it a little.

   I plan on entering it in the canon contest for young video.

   http://rapidshare.com/files/140616508/Thieffinal.pdf.html

   Posted 3 years ago #

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